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EJ Trask's avatar

this is so haunting! incredibly creative too. bravo!

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JLG Noga's avatar

Thanks man! Appreciate the kind words especially from you 🫡

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Edward.Marlo.Ruiz's avatar

REDACTEDDDDD

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JLG Noga's avatar

Bro knows ball

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Saint-Lazare's avatar

The form is very creative, it's gripping and unique, congratulations!

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JLG Noga's avatar

Thanks for the read Lazare!

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Ethan Luce's avatar

That was terrifying! As always great at the slow-burn, and the experimental style here really helps with how the story disorients the reader. Deeply deeply unsettling - and topical too!

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A. R. Eldridge's avatar

Really good man. Incredible imagery from what’s essentially a script format. Very cool.

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JLG Noga's avatar

thanks man! that’s what i was aiming at with this one, seeing how much of a story could i wring out from that

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R. M. Greta's avatar

Holy shit. My stomach dropped a few times. A masterpiece!

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JLG Noga's avatar

Thanks so much Greta ❤️❤️

This one was a bigger risk for me. But I’m glad you felt as if it paid off

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R. M. Greta's avatar

Always take the risk!

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Edward.Marlo.Ruiz's avatar

What a wild fucking ride holy shit. Absolutely a banger and told through mostly dialogue and text?? I could fill in the terror myself through your use of sounds too. Trippy, gritty, and super fucking dope

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JLG Noga's avatar

Yeaahh! that was my idea, to see how much of a story i could paint using only these very specific tools and methods. as i said in another note, it's very much a story told in negative space, both thematically and structurally. Glad it resonated with you! It's standalone but also has little nuggets i'll be exploring in future stories which is super exciting for me

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Aurelian Ashmore's avatar

This is very impressive. Very experimental. I didn’t even know Joe to start with such a piece. You master to channel the chaos. The story is beyond excellent.

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