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R. M. Greta's avatar

Truly disturbing. Great job! The image of the flames at the end reality made it feel like a demon ritual.

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JLG Noga's avatar

Thanks! I was thinking of Black Phillip from The Witch and Mamiya from Cure for this one.

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Maryellen Brady 💗📚's avatar

I love the cultural combo here & creepy vibe.

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Mina Howell's avatar

Wow this is fantastic! So creepy and beautiful 🥰

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JLG Noga's avatar

Thank you so much! I think it being in second-person elevates that feeling. There's a lot of potential there for scares because of that particular POV's immediacy

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Mina Howell's avatar

I think so too!

The addition of Buddhist ideas also added to that feeling, made it seem like a more ancient being if that makes sense!

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JLG Noga's avatar

This tidbit is actually the POV of my antagonist in my WIP horror novel. He's very much defined by Buddhist tenets and is indeed incredibly ancient. There's a lot more backstory than what's on display here, though I was able to carry over the second-person narration from the book into this post since Aurelian's format meshed seamlessly with it.

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Mina Howell's avatar

😮 is that on here?

If not, please let me know when you start selling it so I can grab a copy! That sounds SO good

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JLG Noga's avatar

I appreciate that! It's a bit of a contemporary fantasy/supernatural horror with a whole host of multicultural, folkloric terror at play. Bending lots of genres, too. I'm not close to it being done whatsoever, but once there's news about it, I'll let the people know.

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Mina Howell's avatar

WOW!! Okay you've got to let me know lol

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